I should try distracting my opponents, I mean if it works for professionals!
Ribbing aside, I think this is a good idea. But you might want to put more thought into the meaning behind the moves(or at least actually explain them). Around 7:24 as an example W counter ataris black and your comment is: "Now Black will have to respond if he wants to keep his position."(paraphrasing) Well WHAT position? Black doesn't want to lose that stone, because if white escape to the center the invasion was successful. My 2c for what it's worth.
Commentated games are useful because they can be used as learning tools. Having a stronger player tell you why a move can't be neglected. Or why one part of the board is more important then the other is helpful. Therefore if I were to try to review a pro game, who can hopelessly out read me. I'd try to stick to the fundamentals as much as possible. Forcing moves, making a base, leaning attacks, sector lines, weakness or strength of groups in middle game fighting, and cut points to name a few.
I think you might just be a little rough because you haven't done this before. And you'll definitely improve thinking seriously about pro games.
All and all I like the idea, and encourage you to do more(there can never be enough Go in the world!!). But you definitely want to refine your reviewing process.
I don't know if you found his videos. But Battousai posts his KGS lectures to youtube. Here is a link to one of his pro game reviews.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k1g4gT2OqsU&list=PL05D44E6870BF7154&index=10&feature=plpp_video