Abbreviating the Kido YB comments:
B9 is better at F15.
B15 is better at 16.
B39 is maybe better at C9.
W60 : 88 is more severe.
B79: 81 is maybe better.
B95 ends up painful. He had the opportunity to march into 97.
W120: 123 instead would not seem to die.
W130: 142 is more solid.
W194: with 196 instead he would not have lost.
My comment:
giving Rin huge influence to work with and turn into a moyo
Thickness, not influence. There are good practical reasons for maintaining the distinction. E.g. everyone says "Stay away from thickness." I don't see anyone saying "stay away from influence."
Very abbreviated comments from Go Word:
W28-34: moyo strategy is unusual for Rin. Otake may have made him play it for psychological reasons (i.e. he do not play 17 at D8).
B39: much regretted by Otake (and others). W gets to strengthen his moyo.
B41: honte is L6 but B has to attack as W ignored 39.
44-52: standard settling moves.
W60: 88 is more severe.
B75: vital point.
W82: sacrifice. He gets ample compensation in the centre.
B97: as far s he can go.
B91: necessary.
B109: O17 is safer but not enough.
W118: he missed an easy way to live: N17. But several long sequences here missed by both players. Yamabe Toshiro revealed them. (Yamabe noted for excelling in analysing corner positions). But ko is adequate for W.
W130: greedy.
W156: regretted by Rin. He called it the losing move.
B163: the reason Rin regretted 156.
B170: big part of reason for dissolving the ko was that Rin was in time trouble.
B187: the last incident of the game. Careless. Should be 189.
205: careless; loses 2 points.
Overall the game could be split in two. Up to 102 Rin (W) was ahead. Thereafter he went to pieces, taking risks while in time trouble.